This story is written for The Write Tribe contest incorporating the following 7 words in random order :
At precisely five o’clock, she made a final ‘X’ through the calendar, gathered work files into a tidy stack, and recorded an out-of-office voicemail message.
Her co-worker, who for the last twenty minutes attempted to help a disgruntled customer, covered the telephone mouthpiece with her fingertips and whispered, “Don’t forget to send me a postcard.” She nodded and closed the door, leaving responsibility behind in her corner office.
From her far chair on a secluded stretch of sand, she meditated on the turquoise ocean, a masterpiece of creation stretching to sunset. A lone sea gull floated overhead, dipped toward crashing waves, then soared with dinner in his talons. Stress evaporated into the briny air.
She sipped a salty margarita and watched the local man walking near the water’s foamy edge. With every step, waves collapsed behind him, erasing each sandy footprint as though perfectly choreographed. Across his forearms, strings of beads and shell necklaces glittered in the sunlight. As he approached, he held his offerings toward her and flashed a brilliant smile. His hair was wild and knotted, his face scruffy and tanned.
“Is this enough?” She raised a tarnished coin rummaged from the bottom of her new straw beach bag.
He nodded and placed smaller coins in her palm as change.
The tiny beads were pale blue and aqua green like sea glass and draped almost to her waist so she looped the strand twice. She closed her eyes and listened to the soothing fall of waves. As the sun disappeared into the sea, she realized she would never return to her life in the city.
Lana88 says
I love your writings. SO much awesome imagery!!
Talya Tate Boerner says
Thank you Lana!
Talya's Mom says
This is wonderful. So well written. I loved it.
Talya Tate Boerner says
Gracias.
Vidya Sury says
That was a lovely read, Talya!
Talya Tate Boerner says
Thank you!
Gary Henderson says
You did a lot with 270 words! ๐ When I’m given a length, I usually hit it on the nose.
I’m also going to try this one. I liked the concept of using 7 words randomly. ๐
Talya Tate Boerner says
Thanks Gary! I look forward to reading your story.
Writercat59 says
Love it, Talya. You incorporated the words in seamlessly and I loved the whole premise and setting. I don’t blame her for not returning. I didn’t want to either and was sorry the story had to end.
Talya Tate Boerner says
Thank you!
Sreedev Soman says
wow…beautifully written…who is the she?…is this an impersonal piece…liked the writing style…loved reading it…
Sreedev Soman @ KookyDom
Talya Tate Boerner says
Totally fiction:)) Thanks for reading and commenting.
Patricia A. Laster says
I love doing this kind of exercise. In fact, one of the “Journey” chapters developed after such a one. Check-plus-plus.Plus.
Talya Tate Boerner says
A check-plus-plus-plus from you is flattering!
Talya Tate Boerner says
A check-plus-plus-plus from you is flattering!
Kathy says
This was an amazing story and you did well with the challenge!!
Kathy
http://gigglingtruckerswife.blogspot.com
Talya Tate Boerner says
Thank you Kathy. It was a fun challenge!
Dances With Vodka says
You just took all the pressure off, and sent me straight to heaven! I really need to come here more often. Thank you!
themuseumpiece says
Nice imagery created with words. A good read ๐
Talya Tate Boerner says
Thank you!
Joyce Lansky says
Wonderful way to string the words together. Congratulations!
http://joycelansky.blogspot.com
Talya Tate Boerner says
Thanks Joyce!
Corinne Rodrigues says
She definitely made the right choice! ๐ Thanks for joining the contest, Talya.
Talya Tate Boerner says
Thank you Corinne! I love your contests:))
Tim Hardin says
Very nicely written…I felt as though I was there and witnessed this event. Also, on a different subject, this is a great way to remember words on a list where you take the words and create a story using each word. Not only can you remember all the words, but you can also remember them in order…just sayin’.=)
Talya Tate Boerner says
Thanks Tim!
Dot says
Talya, this sounds like chapter one! Because I’m ready to learn more about her.
Talya Tate Boerner says
Awww thanks Dot! I appreciate your encouragement so much.
Colene says
This is so good! A sequel would be wonderful!
Talya Tate Boerner says
Maybe I’ll have to work on that!
Bryan Jones says
Who would, willingly that is! Great effort!
Talya Tate Boerner says
true Bryan.