This story is written for The Write Tribe contest incorporating the following 7 words in random order :
postcard, coin, tidy, wild, help, calendar, responsibility…
At precisely five o’clock, she made a final ‘X’ through the calendar, gathered work files into a tidy stack, and recorded an out-of-office voicemail message.
Her co-worker, who for the last twenty minutes attempted to help a disgruntled customer, covered the telephone mouthpiece with her fingertips and whispered, “Don’t forget to send me a postcard.” She nodded and closed the door, leaving responsibility behind in her corner office.
From her far chair on a secluded stretch of sand, she meditated on the turquoise ocean, a masterpiece of creation stretching to sunset. A lone sea gull floated overhead, dipped toward crashing waves, then soared with dinner in his talons. Stress evaporated into the briny air.
She sipped a salty margarita and watched the local man walking near the water’s foamy edge. With every step, waves collapsed behind him, erasing each sandy footprint as though perfectly choreographed. Across his forearms, strings of beads and shell necklaces glittered in the sunlight. As he approached, he held his offerings toward her and flashed a brilliant smile. His hair was wild and knotted, his face scruffy and tanned.
“Is this enough?” She raised a tarnished coin rummaged from the bottom of her new straw beach bag.
He nodded and placed smaller coins in her palm as change.
The tiny beads were pale blue and aqua green like sea glass and draped almost to her waist so she looped the strand twice. She closed her eyes and listened to the soothing fall of waves. As the sun disappeared into the sea, she realized she would never return to her life in the city.
talya
Grace Grits and Gardening
Farm. Food. Garden. Life
Grace Grits and Gardening
Farm. Food. Garden. Life
I love your writings. SO much awesome imagery!!
Thank you Lana!
This is wonderful. So well written. I loved it.
Gracias.
That was a lovely read, Talya!
Thank you!
You did a lot with 270 words! 🙂 When I’m given a length, I usually hit it on the nose.
I’m also going to try this one. I liked the concept of using 7 words randomly. 🙂
Thanks Gary! I look forward to reading your story.
Love it, Talya. You incorporated the words in seamlessly and I loved the whole premise and setting. I don’t blame her for not returning. I didn’t want to either and was sorry the story had to end.
Thank you!
wow…beautifully written…who is the she?…is this an impersonal piece…liked the writing style…loved reading it…
Sreedev Soman @ KookyDom
Totally fiction:)) Thanks for reading and commenting.
I love doing this kind of exercise. In fact, one of the “Journey” chapters developed after such a one. Check-plus-plus.Plus.
A check-plus-plus-plus from you is flattering!
A check-plus-plus-plus from you is flattering!
This was an amazing story and you did well with the challenge!!
Kathy
http://gigglingtruckerswife.blogspot.com
Thank you Kathy. It was a fun challenge!
You just took all the pressure off, and sent me straight to heaven! I really need to come here more often. Thank you!
Nice imagery created with words. A good read 🙂
Thank you!
Wonderful way to string the words together. Congratulations!
http://joycelansky.blogspot.com
Thanks Joyce!
She definitely made the right choice! 🙂 Thanks for joining the contest, Talya.
Thank you Corinne! I love your contests:))
Very nicely written…I felt as though I was there and witnessed this event. Also, on a different subject, this is a great way to remember words on a list where you take the words and create a story using each word. Not only can you remember all the words, but you can also remember them in order…just sayin’.=)
Thanks Tim!
Talya, this sounds like chapter one! Because I’m ready to learn more about her.
Awww thanks Dot! I appreciate your encouragement so much.
This is so good! A sequel would be wonderful!
Maybe I’ll have to work on that!
Who would, willingly that is! Great effort!
true Bryan.